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I wrote a poem today!

Usually I hate writing poems because I obsess over rhymes too much and all my poems end up cheesy as heck, but this one I actually like. AND it rhymes! So I illustrated it and...here it is?



IN CELEBRATION OF MY 6TH YEAR ON DA I GUESS


[EDIT] holy granole how did this get over 2000 faves

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thanks everyone! :heart::heart::heart::iconrlytearplz:


[EDIT AGAIN]

Ok, a lot of people seems to be confused about the "whores" part, so I thought I'd make it clearer. By no means is this an insult to sexually flamboyant people.
The line "politicians and whores" is commonly associated with social decay (originated from Watchmen, I believe) and it's also what a lot of nihilists say when they rant about how much the world sucks. Since I'm kinda mocking their attitude here, I quoted them. I thought people would catch the meaning on their own, as I highly dislike explaining something like this, but apparently some people didn't! Oops.
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star-dream Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2017
i love the rising star, this played out like a movie. awesome.

i know how you feel. i am 100 percent bound to be misunderstood
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skyegsd1212 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
This is kind of dramatic, but I love it, the flow of the poem, the rhythm and rhyme, each word could stand alone with the meaning that was given to it. Great job!
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CheeseCakeRoflBunny Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student General Artist
I cant help but feel that this poem is a bit cheeky. ;)
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kastiyana Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
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EgySpawn Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
I figured I should share the wealth
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abie1295 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Man it so good it taste like perfection!
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KZeolite Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful!
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TheSingleCopy Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this! Made me think a lot lol.
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HinderRat Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
cool
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workinginprogess Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This. Is. Beautiful. <[link]>
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VermillionFenrir Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
omg this is so beautiful and touching! I cant even described how your art and the message has touched me :iconrlytearplz:

Its so god freakin beautiful! :icontearplz:
seriously,this making me want to do also draw something liek this,if only my scanner can work well in a time like this :iconheplz:
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philippv745 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
One of the best poems I've ever read, not just because of the wording, but because I love poetry that really makes you think.
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Ilikesclamchowder Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Student General Artist
I remember seeing this a long time ago!
It was back when I didn't have an account, maybe a month earlier I made one.
I never forgot this! And here I see it again!
This is such a wonder piece <3 I love everything about it and it really gets you thinking. :)
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DRexySeamfire Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
By the way. You should read up on green-house gasses. We wouldn't be here without them.
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I am well aware! But you CAN have too much of a good thing, you know! Besides, for me to make the rhyme and rhythm, I can't exactly use "an amount of greenhouse gases that is several hundred ppms above the healthy dose that earth should receive" and give a comprehensive list of all of them

In other words, for the flow to not sound awkward, I'd have to sacrifice some
*beat*
prefection
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DRexySeamfire Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I see)) Just stuck out at me a little bit. How about using the word pollution instead of green-house gasses? Just a thought, whould keep to the beat and sound correct))))
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AuruMidas Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
Wonderful. Just simply wonderful. :)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2011  Student Writer
This is beautiful.
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XDanielcalderon Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011
Thank you, here is the translation of this wondeful work ;) [link]
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooooh! 8D
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skeptic-narcoleptic Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
[link] You inspired me. c:
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oooooh boy am I glad to be the inspiration for something, especially something this pretty! 8DD <33
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skeptic-narcoleptic Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aww, thanks. :'D
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XDanielcalderon Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011
Love it!! Wath font do you used? ^^
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I lost the original file so I'm not 100% sure, but it might have been monotype corsiva
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XDanielcalderon Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
Thanks, but I found this site [link] And I think it's Lucida Italic, anyway, thanks ^^
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I'll send it when I'll finish it ;D
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XDanielcalderon Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011
I forguet say that is for a desmotivational in Spanish if you can tell me I Remake it and I say that you've made it and put in the botom your deviant acount, can you give me permission?
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Lacroa Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Man it's so tempting to write a story based on this ;v;
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
If you want to, go ahead! 8DD

And show me what you come up with! <33
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SiNgInGxSoLaC3xXD Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
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asylum-patient Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2011
This is the most amazing poem I've ever read. I love it <3
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eggplantpocky Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
love this :)
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The-Twelve-gates Featured By Owner May 20, 2011  Professional General Artist
i'd say this is a master piece :)
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NightMargin Featured By Owner May 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I wouldn't exactly call it that, but thank you for the kind regards! <3
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The-Twelve-gates Featured By Owner May 22, 2011  Professional General Artist
;)
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FionaASiren Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully done!
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NightMargin Featured By Owner May 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! 8D
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GlacierDragon Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful, both the poem and the artwork c:
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Aireansa Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That was stunning and very pretty. Loved the flow of the words. Awesome job here.
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! <33
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Aireansa Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome. =)
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Ramesure Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
This is amazing. :thumbsup:
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww thank you! <33
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Ramesure Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011
Hey, no problem! Keep up the good work.
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Helene-Fosse Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm not what you would call a religious person, but this, I just love. The idea of perfection not being very perfect at all... It's brilliant!
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NightMargin Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This isn't meant to be religious, it's more ambiguous than anything, really~
Thank you so much! <3
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